Tristan Gebbia interview

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I don't mean to be a basher, but good grammar helps if you want to be taken seriously. Did I miss the rest of the interview somewhere or did you only ask 3 questions which didn't reveal much about him?

 
Agree on the grammar. Always reread the entire thing, word for word and out loud when you think you're done.

Then go back through and take out ten words to tighten up the language. Then take out ten more. Then read out loud again. I try to do this with anything I write. It eliminates any typos at this point. Also, ask a colleague or friend to read it and give input. You lose all credibility when your reader can see you didn't proof it.

If those three questions are the highlights, I'm not interested in the rest. He gave one or two word answers. Why are the Colts his favorite team? And why does the reader care?

The story is about recruiting. Ask him how often he talks with other SoCal recruits. Who is he targeting? Is a Nebraska coach giving him people to talk to? How well does he know the guys who just visited? Darnay?!?!

Keep pushing forward with this. It's clearly a passion of yours by looking at your site. Dive deeper and give the reader some new information they can't find anywhere. Get opinions from these guys.

And on this board, you won't find many people who disagree that the triple option is the most patriotic play in football!

 
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